We had to describe something, I chose a garden. To get the higher marks we needed to change the mood at some point. My grade stays the same with this piece, could someone, preferably someone who has taught GCSE English, give me a grade and their opinions. This is now my sixth draft and I have put so many hours in and can’t improve.
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Could someone please mark this English description for me, I really need a second opinion.?
Sunday, March 7th, 2010When I am writing, where can I get inspiration from?
Thursday, March 4th, 2010Today, I spent about 3 hours in the library writing my novel. I had planned to spend more tomorrow. But today in the library, I couldn’t write.
I wrote well for about an hour or so. The first part of my writing was creative, lively, and realistic. Then, as the hour ended, my writing became a little dull and dry.
Would you comment on this poem, about an unexpected visitor?
Wednesday, March 3rd, 2010Surprise Visitor
by C.S. Scotkin
I should have known
or had a clue
cats two stepping
on the porch,
playing Baryshnikov
chairs to table
dizzying pas de deux,
I should have guessed.
Screech! warblers hoarse from joy,
squirrelly Tarzans
without vines land on tinny roofs
ducks weave and shuffle
their own parade, kazoo sounds
to greet their twinkly pond
throwing back the sun’s first rays,
Here, catch!
I should have known!
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